Contents 
    1. Paper Writing
        Guidelines
    2. Writing: The Bridge between
        Consciousness and Unconsciousness
    
    
    
© Mark T. Unno 2000
    
    Paper Writing
        Guidelines
    Please follow these guidelines when writing your papers.
    1. Deadlines
      Submit your papers by the deadlines stated in the syllabus. You have
      three grace days for all papers except the final paper, for which
      there are no free extensions. If you have a problem before the final
      paper, be sure to talk to me by the day before the deadline.
    2. Basic Elements
    
      - Mechanics are important. They are the basic tools that make the
        paper possible.
 
      - a) Descriptive
          Title. As simple as this is, some people forget.
 
      - b) Introductory
Paragraph
          or Thesis. A thesis paragraph states what you are setting
        out to show in your paper and how you will do this. An introductory
        paragraph provides the reader with a clear understanding of what the
        paper is about. In general it is a good idea to avoid the overuse of
        the first person voice, since this can interrupt the flow of your
        prose. Here are some examples to think about:
 
    
    
      - Effective introductory paragraph that does not use "I":
 
      - In Dakota-A Spiritual Geography, Kathleen Norris writes
        about her life on the Western plains of the United States. She
        describes it as a kind of monastic world in which she has been able to
        come in contact with her spiritual roots through the lives of the
        people there, the land, and the solitude of her own inner life. She
        does not falsely idealize life on the plains as some kind of paradise
        away from the urban jungle. In fact, she is critical of the insularity
        and pettiness of the small towns in which she lives and works. Rather
        than detracting from the positive sense of her life there, however, her
        critical perspectives make her work more real and lead the reader to
        want to get to know her and the plains better.
 
      -  
 
      - Effective introductory paragraph that uses "I":
 
      - In reading Dakota-A Spiritual Geography, I was struck by
        the beauty of Kathleen Norris' prose and her ability to convey the
        subtleties and complexities of her life there, of people, place, and
        time, the relation between work, art, and the spiritual life. At first,
        I read her work as the account of a woman and a culture vastly
        different from my own. As I continued to read, however, I became aware
        that, in some ways, her world mirrored mine. While speaking out of a
        distinct geographical and cultural landscape, Norris can make us
        recognize features of our own lives of which we may not have been
        previously aware.
 
      -  
 
      - Weak introductory paragraph that uses "I":
 
      - In this paper, I will write about Kathleen Norris's book Dakota-A
          Spiritual Geography.  I will discuss her views on the relation
        between the Dakotas as a geographical location and a spiritual place. I
        will show that there is a connection between the two. I will use ideas
        from her work as well as Carol Christ's ideas about nature. I will also
        show that, while useful in several ways, Christ's ideas are
        insufficient for understanding Norris' complete view of life in the
        Dakotas.
 
    
     
    
      - c) Conclusion.
        The conclusion brings the ideas of your paper back into succinct focus.
        This may involve some summarizing but should also refocus ideas by
        reformulating some of your thesis/introductory ideas in a way not
        possible without having read the body of your paper. You may not answer
        all questions that you raised or resolve all issues outlined in your
        introduction. One way to conclude your paper is to raise further
        questions, showing your awareness of their existence and possibilities
        for further inquiry. Sometimes, the best questions give rise to even
        more questions.
 
      - d) Documentation. Whenever you
        make generalizations or assertions, document your claims with
        references, either from the readings or the lectures. If you make a
        statement that seems controversial and you don't cite a reference, then
        I will not know where your ideas came from. You cannot be too careful
        on this point.
 
      - e) Format
          for References. For
        the final paper, I am going to ask that you all use footnotes or
        endnotes following the format given in the syllabus and the writing
        sample. Please note the use of commas and parentheses. For shorter
        papers, you may use parenthetical notes. (You should follow one of the
        standard formats for parenthetical use.)
 
      - f) Page
          numbers. In case the
        pages come loose, I will be able to read your paper.
 
      - g) Use block
          quotations for
        citations four lines or longer. When using block quotations, do
not
          use quotation marks at the beginning and end of the block. Use
        the margin command rather than the tab command to create block
        quotations. This will make it much easier for you.
 
      - h) Subheadings.
        These are not required, but you may find it helpful to insert
        subheadings as you go along. They can help you to organize your paper
        as well as to let the reader know that new topics are being addressed.
 
    
    3. Mechanics
    
      - a) Check
your
          spelling. There should be few errors in this regard.
 
      - b) Run-on and incomplete sentences. Avoid
        sentences that are too long. Check to make sure that you do not have
        incomplete sentences.
 
      - c) Punctuation. Punctuation should follow standard guidelines.
        There is often confusion about commas. There are a
          few simple rules that will keep you
        out of trouble. I have summarized them here.
          Otherwise, consult a writing
        manual or ask the instructor. "The
Elementary
          Rules of Usage" from William Strunk's The
            Elements of Style covers most cases of comma usage
        including those that apply to
        independent and dependent clauses.
 
      - d) Tenses.
        Be consistent in your use of past and present tense. If you are writing
        a thought paper (ideas, philosophy), it is accepted practice to put
        everything in the present tense. For example, you may write, "The
        Buddha says, . . . ." or "The Tibetan master Milarepa behaves in
        unconventional ways." If you are writing a research paper dealing with
        historical issues, you should put scholarly assertions in the present
        tense ("I think," "Gregory Schopen states") and historical facts in the
        past ("Shakyamuni delivered a sermon," "Devadatta turned traitor"). In
        any case, be consistent.
 
    
    4. Style
    There are a few stylistic matters to note.
    
      - a) Use
          natural English.
        There is no need to fill your paper with technical vocabulary or
        difficult terms. If you do use them, they will have a greater effect
        when you write for the most part in clear, straightforward English.
 
      - b) Avoid
          using too many conjunctions
        and qualifiers, such as "however," "then," and "given that." Usually,
        the reader will know how one sentence relates to the next without the
        use of these terms, and the resulting paper will be easier to read. Use
        your own good judgement as to when they are necessary. As a rule of
        thumb, use sparingly.
 
      - c) Gendered
          pronouns. It is now widely considered that the exclusive use of
        male pronouns to refer to both sexes is unacceptable. There are a
        number of strategies that can be used to negotiate this matter. You may
        use i) male and female pronouns alternately, ii) neutral pronouns such
        as "one" and "they"; however, avoid mixing these two pronouns in the
        same sentence, iii) both (When a person finds him or herself in this
        situation . . .), or iv) "s/he". There are, however, possible
        exceptions. If you have any questions about this, please see me.
 
    
    
      - Don't use "one" and "they" as pronouns for the same referent
        (This confusion arises because of the use of "they" instead of "his" or
        "her.") Be careful when you use humans or human beings to replace
        "men." "Human beings" is often more appropriate than "humans," and
        sometimes "people" is a better choice.
 
    
    5. Common Errors
    
      - a) "Different
          from."
        "Different from" is the correct usage, not "different than."  
 
      - b) "Complementary" versus "Complimentary." Be sure to know the
        difference between these two words. Yin and yang are complementary.
        Words of praise are complimentary.
 
      - c) "Affect" versus "effect." One can measure the economic effects
        of having too much inventory, but one cannot easily affect nationwide
        economic trends that may decrease consumer demand.
 
      - d) A "novel" is a work of fiction. Memoirs, journals,
        biographies, and autobiographies are nonfiction works. Do not refer to
        them as "novels."
       
    
     
    6. Types
of
          Papers
    There are generally three types of papers, thought papers,
      research papers, and creative papers. There are commonly elements of
      all three present, but papers largely fall into one of the three
      categories. The focus on REL 303 is the thought paper; no outside
        research is required. The focus on REL 407 in the shorter papers is
        the thought paper; no outside research is required. The focus on REL
        407 in the final paper may be either a thought paper, which requires
        no outside research, or a research paper involving use of outside
        sources.
    
      - a) Thought papers may make use of materials beyond the required
        reading but need not do so. Rather, the focus is on careful study,
        analysis, and elaboration of ideas presented within a limited context,
        such as a single article or book with some support from assigned
        secondary readings. It is often helpful to focus on one or two ideas,
        passages, or paragraphs and consider the ramifications thereof.
 
      - b) Research papers deal with a careful study of objective
        evidence available to support and refute arguments. You are not
        required to go to outside material, but it is often helpful to obtain
        supporting evidence beyond what is found in the required texts to back
        up your assertions.
 
      - c) Creative papers may include forms such as fictional narrative,
        personal narrative, poetry, and illustrations as part or all of the
        finished product. It is important to work closely with the instructor
        if you wish to do a more creative project.
 
      - d) You may write on one of the suggested topics, or you may
        formulate your own topic; in the latter case you need to write out a
        paragraph-length topic and submit it by email to the instructor for
        approval.
 
      - e) Sometimes it may happen that a more personal narrative style
        will be incorporated into your writing, one that includes personal
        experiences, fictional narrative, or reflections about the writing
        process. Some of the suggested paper topics will elicit different
        styles or genres of writing. However, it can be more challenging to
        adopt alternative styles and genres. If you would like to pursue
        different avenues of writing but are unsure about how to do this,
        samples are available for your perusal.
 
    
    
      - 7. Drafts
 
      - Peer review drafts will be required for some papers. Guidelines
        for peer review will be made available separately.
 
    
    8. Grading
          Criteria
    Although grading is an imprecise art, it is possible to attain a
      considerable degree of consistency. In general, the key points are:
      Represent ideas fairly and accurately, raise critical questions and
      doubts, explore theses questions and doubts to provide a
      sophisticated account of the ideas and issues under consideration,
      and write clearly. I look for the following when reading papers:
    
      - a) Writing. If you write clearly and grammatically, you will
        think clearly and in an organized fashion. If you think clearly, this
        will be reflected in your writing.
 
      - b) Accuracy. Have you represented the relevant ideas fairly? Did you
        document your ideas with direct quotations and/or page
          references?
 
      - c) Focus and coverage-a balance of the two. On the one hand, have
        you covered the main ideas relevant to your topic? On the other, are
        you focused enough? A sense of the larger picture should be present,
        but pursuing too many themes or ideas results in confusion. There should
        also be a degree of analytical reach to your examination of the topic
        that covers more than a bare-bones, one-dimensional reading of the topic
        or text.
 
      - d) Sophistication and depth. Have you taken into account various
        facets of a problem or idea? You can be accurate at a general level
        ("The Buddha was a seeker of truth."), or you can be accurate at a
        sophisticated level ("The Buddha was a seeker of truth who formulated
        his understanding in terms of the four noble truths."). Have possible
        questions and objections been taken into account?
 
      - e) Creativity. Are you open to unexpected insights and a sense of
        adventure?
 
      - f) Grade Scale: A+: 97-100, A: 94-96, A-: 90-93, B+: 87-89, B: 84-86,
        B-: 80-83, C+: 77-79, C: 74-76, C-: 70-73, D+ to D-: 60-69, F 59 and
        below.
 
      - 
        
If you cover criteria
          a) through c), you should get a B. Provided you have gone that far,
          you
          can add further dimensions to your paper. If you have any questions
          about comments I have made on your paper or your grade, please come
          and
          see me. It is important for me to know of any doubts or problems.
       
    
    
      - 8. In Conclusion
 
      - By studying these guidelines, I hope that your learning
        experience will become more pleasurable and rewarding for both you and
        me. These guidelines are meant to help you polish a skill, academic
        writing, that you are developing as you progress. Don't get so hung up
        about them that you feel your creative processes hindered. If anything,
        they should provide just enough of a framework to express your
        analytical and creative skills. The accompanying essay emphasizes the
        creative aspect of paper writing.
 
    
     
      
      
      
    
    
      Writing:
        The Bridge between Consciousness and Unconsciousness[1]
    
    Megumi and Mark Unno
    I like writing. When I am totally absorbed in writing, many ideas
      which have never occurred to me before can pop up in my mind, or once
      confused and fragmentary information and thought can be spontaneously
      organized and become clear. It is one of the most satisfactory
      moments for me.
    Yet, I often struggle for long periods trying to organize ideas in
      front of the cruel white paper. This is especially true when I am
      trying to be systematic and logical, beginning with an outline. Since
      anything unclear or vague is eliminated in the process of making an
      outline, the paper turns out to be organized, clear, and compact, but
      I rarely have a sense of satisfaction.
    What is the difference between a paper which emerges spontaneously
      and one that begins with a concern for logical consistency? I have
      been wondering how I can bridge the gap between these two types of
      writing and the attitudes they represent. I have found some clues to
      these problems in three articles written by Donald Murray, Peter
      Elbow, and William Stafford.[2]
    What they emphasize in common is the process; writing is not the
      description of a result; in fact, writing itself can create the
      result. This means that we should not worry too much about how the
      last draft will turn out, or how we can organize all of our ideas
      before we begin. According to Murray, what we need for writing is
      enough information and a clear purpose: logic or order can appear
      later in the process. Elbow even denies the need for coherence in the
      initial stages of producing writing. He suggests "freewriting," which
      activates the writing process by getting rid of any concern about
      correction. Also, Stafford remarks that the most important things for
      his writing are receptivity and a willingness to give up high
      standards. For all of these writers, logic and organization, which
      has restricted me in certain ways, are secondary at the initial stage
      of production. It is true that logical rigor is important, but we can
      worry about that as much as we like after everything has been written
      down that we want to say.
    What is important in writing is, as the three writers agree, the
      productivity of writing. According to Murray, for example, writing is
      the process of "making something that was not there before, finding
      significance where others find confusion and bringing order to
      chaos."[3] By writing you can
      find new things, which may be a new thought, a new feeling, a new
      idea, or even a new self which you would never have found without
      writing.
    In order to promote this kind of productivity, Murray, Elbow, and
      Stafford agree on the importance of opening our minds. Murray points
      out that writing gives us an opportunity to capture, at the conscious
      level, unconscious feelings and ideas we had not noticed or had
      forgotten. Elbow says freewriting is a method to make our
      consciousness empty so that we can pick out something unconscious
      from deep within our hearts. Stafford remarks that the power letting
      him write is not a conscious device but his "own weak, wandering,
      diffident impulses" and his "confident reliance" upon these
      impulses.[4]
    Writing might be compared to a breeze blowing towards the small
      window between consciousness and unconsciousness. The window is
      usually closed because consciousness is too strong to let the window
      open, and one ends up living in only half of the house, that is, the
      entire world of one's existence. But when writing occurs with the
      mind open, a breeze opens the window and one can encounter other
      aspects of the self, or even another self and become more fully
      integrated: The wonder of the writing process may even be the act of
      another self.
    When I try to stick to the rules of logic from the outset, my
      consciousness prevents the window from opening to the other world. My
      writing then becomes a mere product of my pre-existing consciousness
      rather than the activity of my whole self. Repeated experience and
      practice of freewriting has helped me to open my mind. I can worry
      about logic and organization after my creative impulses have found
      expression on paper.
    
    
© Mark T. Unno, Megumi Unno 1997
    
    [1] This essay is an
      adaptation of Megumi Unno, "Writing: The Bridge between Consciousness
      and Unconsciousness," Foothill College, 1990.
    [2] Mary Jane Schenck,
      Read, Write, Revise: A Guide to Academic Writing (New York:
      St. Martin's Press, 1988), pp. 2-17, cites Peter Elbow, "Freewriting
      Exercises," Writing without Teachers (Oxford: Oxford
      University Press, 1973); Donald Murray, "Why Write?" Write to
        Learn (CBS College Publishing, 1984); and William Stafford, "A
      Way of Writing," Field 2, Spring, 1970.
    [3] Schenck, p. 3.
    [4] Schenck, p. 16.